Lemming.

May. 8th, 2002 07:37 pm
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Buffy, first.

Requited Love
I had to admit I was getting frustrated.
Hee. Hopefully it makes you wonder who is frustrated and why. And it lets you know that the story is in first person, which is a good.

I Don't
Stop being an idiot.
Hmmm. One would hope that you'd continue to read to find out what that means and who's talking to what.

Complicated Things
Riley knows that I don't love him.
Sets up the premise of the story, plus it lets you know who's talking. I like it. It's clean.

Something Broken, Something True
They stared at each other, frozen.
'Who? What? Why?' Is what I'm hoping people would think.

*nsync stuff, now.

Trust
There are only four people that he completely trusts.
I like it. It sets up the rest of the snippet.

Guy Talk
"Lance. I need to talk to you." Since it was Joey, Lance quelled the urge to indulge in a hangover-induced homicide.
The sentence the inspired the rest of the fic. I love that I point out right away who's doing what and why.

Damaged
He wasn't quite at the point of wanting to kill Lance, but the way this party was going, it wasn't going to take long.
Who wants to kill Lance? Because of a party? Why? It sets up JC's feelings nicely, I think.

I'll do the snippets in a separate post.

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